Tassen Spellbinder

An interesting poem. A few things jump out at me, however. "melt somewhere in the distance spread like butter over stardust only to fall right through and tumble across the ...

Let me start by saying that I really liked this, and without further ado, jump right in to the editing. "I'd rather walk a straight path, That will take me ...

I enjoyed this work. The first thing that struck me was your conspicuous lack of punctuation , but as you reference infinity so many times, it contributes nicely to a ...

I too like this poem. Really, I only have one suggestion for you. I would examine the second half of your poem. I noticed little or no punctuation in it, ...

I think that this belongs in Experimental, if there is such a thing- I honestly don't remember. As far as edit's go: "maybe on purpose?" Capitalize the maybe. "Ack!! Me ...

This is, as headintheclouds says, beautiful. I have but one comment for you- I would figure out a way to rewrite this bit: "for I must fight for the saving ...

Before I start the reviews, let me say that I liked this. The first thing that I noticed is the italics. Is there any particular reason? It's not bad, it's ...

Very good poem. My one major issue with it is in this line: "Our hearts beat in perfect collision" I don't think that at all keeps the rhythm, and just ...

First, let me start by saying I liked this poem. That aside, I have a few suggestions. Suggestion 1: Capitalization and punctuation. This poem needs more of both. I would ...

I agree, this piece is quite good. I would recommend that everywhere in your poem a ... (ellipses, I believe they're called) appears, replace it/them with a comma. I find ...

Some things I saw that merit a bit of editing: "dawn will never com" come needs an e. "the diamond peek of wisdom" peak, not peek. "Down from the summits ...

I read Catch-22 for a class assignment, and hated it at first, convinced that Heller would be joining Gregory House as the only person/character on Earth more sarcastic than I, ...

Excellent work. I noticed a few things though, mostly nit-picky punctuation details. After waiting a few minutes to allow me to think, I gasped out,” What did you do to ...

Let me start by saying this was excellent, and a pleasure to read. Not being very good at the quote system, I'm just going to copy-paste the pertinent parts, and ...

Being borderline useless, I have no comments about the story itself, save for that I absolutely loved it, and can't wait for the next installment. What I would like to ...